To express our sincere gratitude
唔知係咪 confirmation bias，覺得最近條街真係出現多咗奇怪英文，所以覺得想紀錄一下，順便俾機會自己寫多啲呢類型嘅嘢。
原句：
To express our sincere gratitude, you can enjoy half-price discount when travelling on MTR lines on 8, 9 April and 13, 14 May 2023.
原句最大問題在於 “to express our sincere gratitude” 呢個 dangling modifier。
dangling modifiers 中文大概係修飾語錯配，原句嘅 subject 係 “you”，亦即乘客、市民，而 “to express our sincere gratitude” 呢個 clause 就係修飾緊個 “you”，咁好明顯邏輯上就唔正確，因為想表達謝意嘅係港鐵公司，而唔係乘客自己，當出現一個咁嘅 mismatch，就可以話句句子出現咗個 dangling modifier。
建議修改：
To express our sincere gratitude, the MTR Corp is offering a half-price discount to anyone travelling with us on 8, 9 April and 13, 14 May 2023.
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